Poem Comments

1. Choose four lines that you like in each poem you write about why
  you like that line.


2. Write about any metaphors or personification in the poem. (リンクをクリック)


These are metaphors:

"Love is an ocean."

In other words, it's deep and wide and you can drift happily forever
or you can drown (lose yourself) in it.

"The poor, lonely child was starved for love."

In other words, the child didn't have anyone to love her and so her
heart was like someone who had no food to eat (starving).


3. Also comment on any images. An image paints a picture with words.
These are images:

"The mother overflowed with love for her newborn baby."

(You can imagine her heart is full of love like water overflowing.)


"Her eyes shot knives at me."

(You can imagine her eyes looking very angry as if knives were
coming out of them.).

Here are some examples of student comments:

The Echo

by Anna Akhmatova

Long ago were paths to the past closed,
And what shall I do with the past, at all?
What is there?
Just washed with blood flat stones,
Or the door, immured in a wall.
Or the echo, that all time me worries,
Tho’ I pray it to be silent, hard --
To this echo happened the same story,
That - to one, I bear in my heart.

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I choose this poem because author feels something she
wants to forget her past. I can understand her feeling.
I also think I try to forget some bad memory my past.
The past in this poem is different idea, for example,
"path to the past closed.” This means she want to go
back to past. I think why she does, maybe that’s she
wants to change some mistake. But she can’t go back,
so it’s sad feeling. Also past is an echo. She doesn't
want to remember some bad thing, so she pray it to be
silent hard, but it all the time worries, so it’s hard
for her I think. I also have some memories I want to
forget. I read this parts, I feel sympathy. I thought
there was a person thought like my thinking.The memories
are very scary also I think because she says “washed
with blood flat stone.” It’s very violence.
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Remember

by Christina Rosetti

Remember me when I am gone away,
Gone far away into the silent land;
When you can no more hold me by the hand,
Nor I half turn to go, yet turning stay.
Remember me when no more day by day
You tell me of our future that you plann'd:
Only remember me; you understand
It will be late to counsel then or pray.
Yet if you should forget me for a while
And afterwards remember, do not grieve:
For if the darkness and corruption leave
A vestige of the thoughts that once I had,
Better by far you should forget and smile
Than that you should remember and be sad.

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I like this poem because it’s very kind and
warm, but also sad. I think that “I am gone
away” means death. However, this line doesn't
say it directly. It’s very poet. I feel painful
heart from this line so I like this line. I also
like “And afterwards remember, do not grieve.”
His conflicting feelings appear to this line. I
want you to remember, but I don’t want you feel
sad. She is gentle, and she is lonely. Therefore
I like it. “Nor I half turn to go, yet turning
stay” is interesting. She feels conflicting
heart, and she can’t decide. Her body turns,
but still she stays. She knows she have to go,
but her heart want stay. “The silent land” I
think it means heaven.
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素性法師

今来むと
いひしばかりに
長月の

有明の月を
待ち出でつるかな

English Translation

Just because she said,
"In a moment I will come,"
I've awaited her

Until the moon of daybreak,
In the long month, has appeared.

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This poem is very peaceful, so I can feel
calmness when I read it. I think the story
in the poem is a little sad because the writer
is lonely. He waits for his girlfriend but she
doesn’t come to him soon. I think his heart
is not decided what to do. He wants to see her
so he thinks maybe he wait, but he feels time
keeps passing and he is tired of waiting.
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